Comments on: Writing Fiction is Hard

By: rb

rb — Wed, 28 Oct 2015 18:58:11 +0000

I love that you ask for input. THAT is some real courage. I applaud you.

All this is now going through my head:

What’s the air smell like? Is there a breeze? Whispy clouds or clear blue sky? Does the rider have a fine coat of desert dust on his arms and lower legs? Or is it one of those rare moist days that keeps the dust down? As he starts to work, what’s it taste like? a little salty with the sweat and suncreen running down his face? is it early enough that the sweat is cooling under his camelbak and getting clammy? Are their salt streaks on his gloves or did he remember to clean them? IS this day 1 or 2 of the expedition? Does he need a shower? Is his lack of hygiene why everyone gaped him? Did he have one too many last night, and is a shaking off the fog? Or did he not hydrate yesterday and is feeling the effects? Is he used to being dropped or is he usually the dropper? Is the ground loose over hard? Moab red compacted dust? Composited granite? Sandy washes? DO we have any trees or just the red rock canyons and cliffs?

I don’t know if any of these things are truly important to anyone else, but I really need to know if I am going to put myself on the Kokopelli trail — which I have never ridden.

post impact…is he bleeding? no breaks, but did his handlebar hit him right in the guts or leg (mine always does…perhaps I’m just bad at this…)

why is he singlespeeding? is everyone, or just our hero?

He seems bothered…clearly irritated with the others perhaps not taking on water…is the ride getting him out of his daily life? Is he worried about whatever is happening somewhere away from the trail? Is this a once-in-a-lifetime for the other folks or regular thing? IS he stuck guiding when he wants to be riding?

I guess I need to get Ride3 for my answers? Looking forward to it!

By: Chicago Nick

Chicago Nick — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 18:43:10 +0000

Needs more zombies.

By: Don

Don — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 16:14:35 +0000

Pulitzer worthy. Hopefully there’s a “Gelande Quaffing” scene.

By: Sara

Sara — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 13:40:56 +0000

Love it – can’t wait to read the rest!!

By: snpiperpilot

snpiperpilot — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 12:58:04 +0000

That’s just flat out cruel

By: Shugg McGraw

Shugg McGraw — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 09:53:23 +0000

That’s why I like riding in the UK. The gun laws here mean that the trails aren’t littered with corpses.

By: MattC

MattC — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 03:19:01 +0000

And @ Wharton_crew…why on earth where the long blond locks of streaming-hair trying to close the gap between his friends? Are they man-eating locks? (Feed me Seymore, FEED ME!)

By: MattC

MattC — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 03:15:46 +0000

Ahhhh…the Chupacabra SPEAKS! Nice Fatty!! “I think he’s dead.” Yep…it’s the good-ol’ standard Chupacabra
Operating Procedure (COP)…where he lures his NEXT victim in close by his calm demeanor.

By: davidh-Marin,ca

davidh-Marin,ca — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 02:26:26 +0000

@wharton_crew
How ’bout Fatty just uses your ‘Fabio’ like image on the book cover?

By: wharton_crew

wharton_crew — Tue, 27 Oct 2015 00:21:39 +0000

Hey Fatty, if I give you $1, will you add one of my lines into your book, just so I can say I’ve ‘been published’?

“He pushed himself harder still, long blond locks of his hair streaming behind him, trying to close the gap between his friends. His bronzed chest muscles rippled with each ragged breath, a reminder of the two things in the world that could make him feel so alive – biking and her.”

Oh, I should probably admit that I’m an aspiring romance novel writer. :-)